The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart and bar chart illustrate data by showing
location
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the location
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of dance classes and presenting
types
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the types
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of classes young people attend in a town in Australia.
Overall
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, almost half of dance classrooms are located in private studios, compared to other places that
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apply
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take
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more than a quarter.
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, there are opposite trends between different dancing types chosen by
two
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the two
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age groups. For selecting
of
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apply
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dancing classrooms,
although
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people prefer going to private studios, there are still 24%and 18% of teenagers
that
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who
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choose school halls
and
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,
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community halls and
other
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others
as their
practise
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practice
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spaces.
While
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college-based studios became a minority option. By focusing on the data of age distribution for dancing style, it is obvious that ballet is the most popular one among
age
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students under the age
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under
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of
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11,
just
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with just
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a bit over 600 students
took
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taking
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it. Whilst modern style is the top choice for children between 11 and 16, and there are over 500
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apply
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of them
took
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who took
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it.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • attending
  • currently
  • location
  • variety
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • jazz
  • venues
  • popularity
  • attendees
  • juxtaposing
  • correlating
  • proximity
  • cultural influences
  • trends
  • anomalies
  • monopoly
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • enrollment
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