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The graph below gives information about Dubai gold sales in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the monthly
sales
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 of gold in Dubai throughout the year in 2002. The figures are measured in millions of Dirhams.
Overall
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, gold
sales
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 in Dubai experienced significant fluctuations over the 12 month period.
Although
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sales
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 reached a peak in
March
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, the general trend was unstable, eventually ending at a figure similar to that of January. In January, gold
sales
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 began with 200
million
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 Dirhams. The figure soared over the next two months, reaching a peak
at
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 350
million
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 in
March
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.
However
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,
this
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 peak was followed
a
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dramatic drop;
sales
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 decreased steadily over the next four months, bottoming out at just over 100
million
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 in July, which was less than one-third of that in
March
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. Turning to the second half of the year,
sales
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 recovered sharply to 200
million
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 in August, returning to the same level
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 the beginning of the year. After another drop to roughly 120
million
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 in September, the figure rebounded again and remained relatively stable at just under 200
million
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 for the final three months. Ultimately,
March
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 was the most successful month for selling,
while
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 July and September were the worst.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, march, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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