Your parents will be celebrating their 40th anniversary next month. You are planning a big celebration, but you are not sure how to make the occasion really memorable. Write to a friend, who is a professional event planner. In your letter: explain why the occasion is special ask for his/her assistance set up a time to meet at your friend's convenience to discuss your plans

Dear Fenil, I hope you are doing well. I am writing to ask for your advice on planning an event for my
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40th wedding anniversary. It will be next
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Sunday, 17 March,
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can be a great opportunity for me to make it even more special for them by organising a grand party for them.
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day will be really special, as my brother took a week off from his university, just to be here for the anniversary and spend time with the family.
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is why my parents are super excited about the party.
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, I am planning to invite all of our close relatives too. I am really confused
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how to plan everything
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you are good at organising events, I need your help with decorations and
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arrangements
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, I need some suggestions on
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and drinks menu. We can discuss
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in detail by meeting at
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house on 14 March, around 4 PM. Let me know if
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date and time
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for you
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looking forward to seeing you soon. Best regards, Darshan

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Say more about why the day is special for your parents, not only for your brother and family.
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Ask for help in a more clear way, with full details of what you want your friend to do.
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The meeting time is clear, but say you can change it if your friend is busy.
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Link some ideas with easy words like also, so, and because.
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Check word order and small grammar points so the letter reads more smoothly.
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Keep each paragraph to one main point and make the end of each part very clear.
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You answered all three parts of the task.
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The tone is friendly and fits a letter to a friend.
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The letter has a clear opening, body, and closing.
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Your ideas are easy to follow in most parts.
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The greeting and closing are both good and polite.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • forty
  • anniversary
  • special
  • family
  • friends
  • memory
  • plan
  • help
  • meet
  • talk
  • date
  • time
  • place
  • food
  • drink
  • cake
  • music
  • speech
  • photo
  • theme
  • color
  • light
  • invite
  • guest
  • budget
  • schedule
  • run
  • show
  • idea
  • thank
  • kind
  • easy
  • simple
  • great
  • wonderful
  • celebrate
  • event
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