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The flow chart illustrates the consequence of deforestation. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

This
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 flow chart
demonstrate
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demonstrates
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 the consequences of deforestation
,we
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. We
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 are going to discuss step by step in
this
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 essay what happens after
clear cutting
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clear-cutting
 of forests and what problems it could
cause
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 Deforestation leads to numerous natural
disasters
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disasters,
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 the most
commoon
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common
 ones are flooding ,
top
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topsoil erosion
soil
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 erodes,less biodiversity
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, as
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as well as an
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and
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 increased drought.
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Firstly
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Firstly,
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clear cutting
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clear-cutting
 of forests
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cause
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causes
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 heavy logging equipment
compresses
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to compress
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 the
soil
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which
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, which
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lead
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leads
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 to
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soil
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the soil
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becomes
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becoming
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 hard and baked
which
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, which
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 result to rain water running off ,
thus
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 floodings appear , it
also
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cause
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causes
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 fewer roots that hold the top
soil
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 in
which
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, which
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 lead top
soil
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 erodes.
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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 deforestation
lead
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leads
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 to increased risk of burning
that
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, that
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 result to pioneer spices to move in
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, that
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that
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causing
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cause
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 less
bioadversity
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biodiversity
,
aswell
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as well
 as

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cause, soil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • flow chart
  • consequence
  • deforestation
  • process
  • cutting down
  • loss
  • forest cover
  • wildlife habitat
  • disruption
  • ecosystems
  • soil erosion
  • water quality
  • release
  • carbon dioxide
  • atmosphere
  • contribute
  • global warming
  • climate change
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