the maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should <

These maps illustrate a bookstore in 2000
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at
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particular moment ,
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we are going to discuss its features and compare it.
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this
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bookshop
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seen a large transformation since 2000
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now ,
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some sections remained at the
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same place
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still
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, we can
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see that a cafe has been added inside. During 2000 we can see by the
entrance
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we have the travel books
section
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,on the left there used to be a
fiction
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section
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taking from the
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to the top all the way next to it another
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section
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, and there was (Art.Hobbies,cookery) sectionsin the middle between the travel and
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section
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,unde them we have non-
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section
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which took the place next toservice desk that on top of it there was the final
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of new books. Compared to now by the
entrance
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the travel
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remains at the same place
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new books and service desk, the other placement of sections had completely switched, since the top left by the
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now starts with the art
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next to the hobbies
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,on the right theres
fiction
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and on the
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corner
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now its a non-
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station,
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a cafe that took the non-
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spot in 2000 with some tables in the middle.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words entrance, section, fiction with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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