You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or the company which supplied the equipment. In your letter Describe the problem with the equipment Explain how this problem is affecting your work Say what you want the shop or company to do

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction towards the recent purchase I made from your shop. I work remotely as a technical support agent, so I bought a Bluetooth headset for work purposes.
However
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, after a few days of using it, I started having issues with the sound quality.
This
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creates a lot of problems for me as I have to take many calls during my work hours to solve the customers' queries, but
due to
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the poor sound quality, I am not able to hear properly what the next person is trying to say.
Moreover
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, the Bluetooth
also
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keeps disconnecting multiple times, which made my
overall
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experience with the product really disappointing. I would appreciate it if you could provide me with a refund for
this
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item or a replacement with no additional charges. I am
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attaching the receipt for your reference. Hoping to hear from you soon. Yours sincerely, Darshan

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task response
Add one more clear detail about the sound problem, like noise or low voice.
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Say more about how this problem hurts your daily work, for example missed calls or slow work.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clearer link at the start of the second part, like 'Because of this' or 'As a result'.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each part to one main point only, so the letter feels even more clear.
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You answer all parts of the task clearly.
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Your tone is polite and right for a formal letter.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are both used well.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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