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Band 3

The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

These maps provide key information about the changes at Beechwood Farm in 1950 and today.
Overall
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, it is clear from the plans that the farm has undergone a considerable number of changes.
In addition
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, the sheep’s location had the biggest space,
whereas
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 now there is no space for sheep.
According to
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 what is shown in the map of 1950, there was a
track
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 coming from the main road. There was a barn
at the end
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 of the
track
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,
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 on the right side of the
track
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. Different fields, including
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furte
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fruit
 trees , soft fruites and vegetables,are near the main road. Farmhouse in the middle of the barn and chickens. In terms of nowadays, the
track
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 has been replaced with a road, and there are parking lots constructed at the beginning and the end. There are multiple facilities that have been built in sheep's location, including
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 camping field
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 and solar panels. The barn has been demolished, and holiday cottages have been built.

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Make the overview more clear. Say the main changes in one simple sentence.
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Add more key changes from both maps. Do not miss parts of the farm.
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Use clear place words like left, right, north, south, near, and between.
coherence and cohesion
Group ideas better. Write one body part for 1950 and one body part for today, or group by area.
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Check sentence order. Some lines are not full sentences and are hard to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a simple way, like overall, in 1950, today, while, and however.
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You gave an overview, and this is good for Task 1.
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You noticed big changes like the new road, parking, and cottages.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a basic intro, overview, and details.
coherence and cohesion
You tried to compare past and present, which helps the reader.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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