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Band 3.5

You are due to move into a rented apartment next week but you will not be able to due to an unexpected problem. Write a letter to the property manager. In your letter Explain the situation Describe your problems Tell him/her when you think you can move in

Dear Sir
,
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 Madam, I am writing to inform you about an unexpected problem. I was planning to
move
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 into a new apartment next week, but I couldn't do it. Because
,
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My
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my
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 mother died yesterday.
That is
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 why I have a lot of things to do. Her funeral could be held next week. I need enough time to heal my heart.
In addition
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, I tripped and fell down today. So, my legs were broken.
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Also
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 I need enough time to cure my legs. Probably, I could
move
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 into a new place in five weeks.
However
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, if I could use a
wheelchiar
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wheelchair
, I could
move
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 into there in two weeks. If I
could not
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move
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into
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in
two
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within two
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 weeks, do I need to pay money? I hope you could reply to my message as soon as possible and accept my decision. Yours sincerely, Kauzya Nakagawa

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but some parts need more clear detail. Say the problem, the effect, and your move-in day in a more direct way.
task response
Task response: Use a more polite tone. For example, ask if you may move in later and ask about payment in a calm way.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are in a good order, but some linking words are not used well. Use simple links like because, so, also, and however carefully.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Keep one main idea in one paragraph. This will make your letter easier to read.
task response
Task response: You cover the main points: the situation, the problems, and a possible move-in time.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your greeting and closing are suitable for a formal letter.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • move
  • rented
  • apartment
  • problem
  • unexpected
  • situation
  • financial
  • emergency
  • efforts
  • resolve
  • date
  • time
  • manager
  • contact
  • help
  • personal
  • issues
  • prevent
  • possible
  • month
  • week
  • weekend
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