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In most universities there are more male students than female students on science courses. What is the reason for this? What could be done for balance out the number?

Most males tend to choose
science
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 courses at
collage
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college
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 more than
female
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females
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 in a noticeable way
, how we can
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. How can we
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 balance
this
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 and
encourages
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encourage
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 more women
attend
Verb problem
to attend
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science
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 courses?
Firstly
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, men in general tend to prefer
science
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 majors at a collage for multiple reasons,
first,
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they are apparently conscious that when studying
science
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, you overcome life's adversities,
for example
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, they get a considerable job, they understand life more and they value the importance of
science
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 because
science
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 generate ideas into the brain and turn the brain into an engain, and that's great.
Secondly
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, how
we can
Correct word order
can we
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 increase the chance of women
to get
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getting
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 involved in
science
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 majors and see more
female
Fix the agreement mistake
females
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 at the universities?

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Answer both parts more fully. Say why this happens and what can be done.
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Give clear main ideas in each paragraph. One main idea, then explain it.
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Use real and clear examples. Your example about jobs is too general.
coherence and cohesion
Add a short conclusion at the end.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas in a simple way: First, Also, For example, Finally.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each sentence connects to the question. Some ideas go off topic.
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You try to answer both questions.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has paragraph breaks and a basic order.
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You use one example to support an idea.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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