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The bar chart shows the average number of hours per week that men and women spend doing activities around the home.

The given bar chart compares the average
time
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 that males and females spend per week on various household chores. At first glance, it is evident that, with the exception of reading,
women
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 spend more
time
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 on household chores than
men
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,
while
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men
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 spend more
time
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 on leisure activities.
To begin
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 with,
women
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 spend the most
time
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 on cooking, at 15
hours
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 per week, compared to approximately 9
hours
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 for
men
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.
Women
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also
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 spend more than double the amount of
time
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 as
men
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 cleaning the house, though
this
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 chore consumes less
time
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 than the other chores for both sexes. Again, washing up is predominantly a task undertaken by
women
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 rather than
men
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, at 7 and 5
hours
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 respectively.
In contrast
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, the most popular is watching television, with slightly more males than females partaking in
this
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 activity on a weekly basis. Interestingly,
Men
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 spend nearly 3 times more than
women
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 surfing the Internet. The
hours
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 spent on reading are fairly similar for males and females at around 5 per week. Gardening accounts for just a few
hours
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 for both sexes

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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, women, men, hours with synonyms.
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