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The graph shows the amount of money spent on book in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

A general trend seen in
on
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this
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 graph is that all four
countries
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 have had an increase in dollars spent on books over the
last
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 ten years. In the
last
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 five years.
Austria
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 has had the largest spike in money spent, by more than doubling
it's
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its
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 spending over the
last
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 ten years. In 1995, all these
countries
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 spent less on books than they did in 2005.
This
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 trend shows a clear rise in interest in books
in
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 citizens of these European
countries
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. For most
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countries
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countries,
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this
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 rise has been gradual and not linear, but over
time
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 all the amounts are higher as of 2005. There seems to be a positive correlation in both 1995 and 2005 between the GDP of a country and the amount of dollars spent by
it's
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 people on literature.
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 is logical, since the more money a nation has, the more
they
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it
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 can spend. Since 2001,
Austria
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 has had a sharp incline on the graph and has overtaken Italy in
it's
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its
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 spending.
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 sharp incline could be explained
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due to
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by the
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 recent economic success of the Austrian government,
while
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 the Italian economy has been struggling as of late.
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 they both increased,
Austria
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 did so at a much faster rate. In conclusion, all the depicted nations on
this
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 graph have had an increasing trend
on
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 their spending on literature.
Austria
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 surpassed Italy in their ranking on
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 list,
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however
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every depicted entity spent more.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, austria with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "depicted" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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