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The typical teaching situation of a teacher and students in the class will not exist by the year 2050. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 254 words.

The traditional teaching
system
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 of
teacher
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teachers
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 and
students
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 in the class
said
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 to
be
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apply
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not
to
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take place after
year
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the year
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of
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apply
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2050. I absolutely agree with the statement given the situation of the
world
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's educational changing
system
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 because of
pandemic
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the pandemic
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which
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, which
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 forced
students
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 to study online
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as
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 well as the ease of
the
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apply
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recording and spreading valuable information across the
world
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.
Situation
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 with
pandemic
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the pandemic
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 taught people how quickly
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 nation
adapt
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should adapt
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 to changes, especially
at
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in
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 study and work. Online classes
are
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have
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 mostly
taken over the
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replaced
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 traditional classes
due to
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world
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's
educational changing
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changing educational
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system
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 because of the Covid, which
made
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has required
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 all
students
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 to obtain their
degree
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degrees
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 online. Some majors successfully polished and enhanced
thier
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their
 educational curriculum so
students
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 will not lose knowledge quality,
in
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for
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 instance IT industry became very
succesful
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successful
,
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 its easy learning curve and
adaptibilty
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adaptability
 to
job
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the job
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 market. Economically, the government
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also can
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can also
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 benefit from the online or recorded educational programs where dozens of professionals
are
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 graduated and landed a job without even leaving their houses.
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, many
enterpreneurs
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entrepreneurs
 in education have recorded lessons and put them online by spreading not only valuable information but
also
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 making a profit out of it.
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, education has become accessable and learning has never been so easy for all people in the
world
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, teaching
at
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in
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 class has
been always
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always been
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 a classical type of learning
,
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however
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however,
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 with
given
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the given
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 crisis of
pandemic
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the pandemic
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 and expanding opportunities of
internet
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the internet
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 led to adapting
education
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the education
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system
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as well as
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learning
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the learning
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 abilities of all
students
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 around the globe.

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Answer the question more directly. Say why you agree, and also show how far you agree.
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Add one more clear main idea, such as why schools may still need real classes in 2050.
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Use more specific examples. For example, name one subject that works well online and one that does not.
coherence and cohesion
Make each body paragraph have one clear topic only.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas in a simple way. Use words like First, Also, However, and As a result.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects clearly to the one before it.
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You give a clear opinion from the start: you agree with the statement.
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You use real world examples, like Covid and online study.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a basic structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Some linking words are used, such as Moreover and As a consequence.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology advancements
  • virtual learning
  • online education
  • individualized learning
  • personalized learning
  • facilitative role
  • collaborative learning
  • evolve
  • adapt
  • social interaction
  • communication skills
  • teacher-student relationships
  • flexible learning
  • lifelong learning
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