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You want to sell some of your furniture. You think a friend of yours might like to buy it from you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter explain why you are selling describe the furniture suggest a date when your friend can come and see the furniture

Dear Raman, I hope you are doing well. I am writing to let you know that I am going to sell some home appliances. Since all my family members live in Toronto, I have decided to live with them
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 next month.
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, my
parent
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 house is already furnished with modern equipment;
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, I do not need my home furniture any more.
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, not only will I sell furniture appliances,
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 as a microwave, a fridge, and an oven, but you can
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 purchase any other things, namely a bed, a couple of books, and a cupboard. All of them are in good condition as I purchased them
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 year. I will sell them at a reasonable price. If you want to purchase the items, you can visit my home
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 the upcoming weekends. I
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 busy on weekdays,
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 my professional commitments. See you soon, Lovingly, Rupinder.

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Say clearly that you are selling furniture, not home appliances, because the task asks about furniture.
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Give one clear day or time for your friend to come, for example, next Saturday afternoon.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph on one main point: why you sell, what the items are, and when your friend can come.
coherence and cohesion
Use easy link words like also, because, and so. Some long lines sound hard to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Check small word forms, for example my parents' house, any more, and I am usually busy.
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You answered all three parts of the task.
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The tone is warm and friendly for a letter to a friend.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear opening, body, and ending.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas mostly follow a good order.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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