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Band 2.5

Some people think it is better for one single legal system throughout the world. Others say countries should have their own laws. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is often argued that
unified
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a unified
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 judicial framework is more beneficial globally,
others
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while others
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 assert
independent
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that independent
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 laws should be maintained by each nation.
This
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 essay will look into both aspects prior to drawing a meaningful view. One of the most apparent reasons a unified legal system facilitates global cooperation and boosts the economy.
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 is because businesses can operate more efficiently without navigating different national laws.
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, the European Union has established
standardized
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standardised
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 regulations across member states, which
facilitates
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facilitate
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 international trade and movement.
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, there are convincing arguments for maintaining independent national laws,
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 as cultural diversity. Since
ever
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every
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 society has different religious beliefs and historical backgrounds,
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 means one law
sets
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 approach could lead to social unrest.
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, many Asian countries have strict regulations based on their heritage and religion, which might not be accepted in Western societies. To recapitulate, it is widely believed that the same legal system for
whole
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the whole
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 world is greater.
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, another point that should not be overlooked is
own
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one's own
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 set of law foe each one. After considering both perspectives, I believe it is clearer that the demerits of the statement
.
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are.
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Write your opinion in a clear way in the last part. Now your view is hard to understand.
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Answer both sides fully. Give one more clear idea for each side.
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Use examples that are more direct and easy to link to your main idea.
coherence cohesion
Make each body part start with a clear main point sentence.
coherence cohesion
Link ideas in a simple and smooth way. Some lines now feel broken or not complete.
coherence cohesion
Check the last part carefully. Your ending should be clear, short, and easy to follow.
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You discuss both views, so you answer the main question.
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You give examples like the European Union and Asian countries.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear intro, two body parts, and a final part.
coherence cohesion
The order of ideas is easy to follow in most parts.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • legal system
  • global unity
  • consistency
  • human rights
  • trade regulations
  • environmental regulations
  • cultural differences
  • sovereignty
  • self-determination
  • feasibility
  • international business
  • transnational issues
  • legal traditions
  • compromise
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