The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph illustrates the average of
temperatures
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in three different
metropolis
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metropolises
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:
London
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,
Sydney
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and New York,
while
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the table gives the total annual
hours
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of
sunshine
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in the same
metropolis
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. The city that has the highest
temperature
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is
Sydney
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and
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it’s
also
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the city with the highest
sunshine
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hours
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between the three. The
temperatures
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in
Sydney
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since
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from
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January
until
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to
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March are stuck
on
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at
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25
degrees
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while
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on Aprile until June we have a drop of 10
degrees
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.
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, in July the
temperatures
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start to increase
and
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in December they become stable again
on
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at
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25
degrees
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,
while
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the total annual
of
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number of
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sunshine
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hours
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is 2473. In
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London
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London,
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the situation
very
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is very
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different
,
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;
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the weather is really cold in January,
infact
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in fact
, the
temperature
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is around 10
degrees
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, but in February the weather changes and the
grades
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temperatures
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are increasing. We reach the highest
temperature
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in July, but after August, we can notice
an
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high drop
of the
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in
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temperatures
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until November. The
temperature
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become
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became
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stable again in November. The total annual
of
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number of
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sunshine
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hours
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in
London
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is 1180, much different
compered
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compared
to
Sydney
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. In New
York
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York,
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the
temperatures
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don’t reach 25
degrees
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. We can see how the
temperatures
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increase
since
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from
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January
until
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to
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June and become stable for the other three months. The highest
temperatures
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in these months
is
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are
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20
degrees
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. After
August
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August,
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the
temperatures
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decrease
like
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in
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London
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. The total annual
hours
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of
sunshine
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in New York
is
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are
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2535
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2535,
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higher than
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London
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in London
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but lower compared to
Sydney
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Vocabulary: Replace the words temperatures, london, sydney, hours, sunshine, temperature, degrees with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average
  • temperature
  • sunshine
  • monthly
  • annual
  • comparison
  • characteristics
  • detailed analysis
  • highest
  • lowest
  • examination
  • relationship
  • illustrate
  • patterns
  • rainfall
  • climate
  • considerable variation
  • significantly
  • notable
  • data representation
  • regional differences
  • yearly averages
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