You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level.

Dear Mr Tim, I am writing

this

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letter to enquire about the advertisement I came across about the walking tour your company is organising. I am a

45 year old

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45-year-old

married man with two kids and a wife . As I am working in a corporate job

which

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, which

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makes it hard for me to take time for fitness activities , I feel

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event is my escape for some adventure . I

use

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used

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going

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on long walks

during

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until my early thirties, as I feel these long walks are

therapautic

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therapeutic

both mentally and physically.

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this

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would be

great

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a great

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opportunity for me to

re live

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relive

my memories. It would really be helpful

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apply

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if you

can

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could

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help me with some basic information

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such

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, such

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as the tenure of

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tour and

also

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apply

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the different price

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structures,

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if you have.

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, if you can

also

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tell the place where you are

organising

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organising,

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it will make it easier for me to make the

commutation

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communication

and other

itenary

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itinerary

arrangements. As

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apply

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told

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mentioned

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above about my age , I do not want to hide that I am a bit healthy too. Not falling in the category of obese, but my body weight is 210 pounds

and

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, and

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also

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have knee pain . I can provide a fitness certificate from my family doctor if

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can be

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a cause

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for

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concern for

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event. Hope to get

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information from you soon. Yours

Sincerly

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sincerely

, John Smith

tarun.shar1994

Mar 19, 2026

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task response

For task response: You answer all parts, but ask more clearly for the dates, price, and place.

task response

For task response: Your reason for joining is clear, but make it shorter and more direct.

coherence and cohesion

For coherence and cohesion: Your letter has clear parts, but some lines are too long and hard to follow.

coherence and cohesion

For coherence and cohesion: Use simple link words like also, so, and because in a careful way.

task response

For task response: You explain well why the tour is important to you.

task response

For task response: You clearly say that you are worried about your fitness level.

coherence and cohesion

For coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.

coherence and cohesion

For coherence and cohesion: Each paragraph mostly has one main idea.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

241 words

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