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The pie chart below show the number of native speakers of different languages in Canada in 1996,2006,and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

This
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 report summarises the data of native
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 in Canada from 1996 to 2016. It will assess the native
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 in 3 categories
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English
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, French and Non-Official
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. Regarding native
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 of
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, they decreased mildly and steadily from 1996 to 2016, from 60% in 1996, to 58% in 2006, to 57% in 2016, with a total
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 of 3% in 2 decades. Apart from
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, the native
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 of French
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 decreased steadily at a small range from 1996 to 2016, from 23% in 1996, to 22% in 2006, to 21% in 2016, with a total
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 of 2%, a
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 of 1% every decade. Despite the
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English
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 and French native
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, native
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 of non-official
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 increased from 1996 to 2016 with a larger range. Non-official language
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 increased from 17% in 1996, to 20% in 2006, to 22% in 2016, with a total increase of 5%. To
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 the native
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 of
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 and French decreased, the native
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 of non-official
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 increased.
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 may be explained by Canada's multiculturalism-related policies. In the previous decades, Canada has been promoting multiculturalism and has been welcoming immigrants. These policies may have increased the population who are native
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 of non-official
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, and have decreased the population who speak official
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words speakers, english, languages, decrease with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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