The line graph below shows the number of tourists (in millions) visiting four countries — France, Japan, Australia, and Brazil — between 2010 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates how much tourists travelled in four
countries
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over the 10 year
period
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from 2010 to 2020.
Overall
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,
average
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the average
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tourism
rate
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fluctuated considerably across all four
countries
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in
this
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10-year
period
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, with France remaining the dominating country
while
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Australia experienced the most stable tourism
rate
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. In 2010, France’s number of
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tourist
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tourists
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had the highest
rate
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at 50
million
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,
while
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Brazil’s
tourist
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rate
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considerably lagged at just 8
million
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. Between 2010 and
2014
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2014,
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both
countries
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experienced steady growth. France climbed to its peak of 60
million
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tourist
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tourists
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in 2018, before
experience
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experiencing
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the modest decline to 45
million
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by 2020. During the second half of the
period
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, Brazil’s
tourist
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rate
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slightly decreased.
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, Japan and Australia reached
its
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their
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peak at 40
million
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and 20
million
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in 2018 . Between 2010 and 2018, these two
countries
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number of travellers
rate
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rose gradually. In 2020, Japan
shown
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showed
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the most
dramatically
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dramatic
decline to 20
million
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meanwhile
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,
Australia
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while Australia
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dropped moderately in
this
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two-year
period
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to 15
million
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. By the end of the
period
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, all four
countries
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witnessed a decline,
while
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Japan’s
tourist
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rate
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was halved from
previous
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the previous
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2 years
rate
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, period, rate, tourist, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "considerably" was used 2 times.
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