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The chart below compares the percentages of tourism dollars spent in different economic sectors in two time periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows
finance
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,
food
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 processing, manufacturing,
tourism
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 and
natutal
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natural
 energy(oil, caol and gas)
proporation
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proportion
 contribute to Brazil's
GDP
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 in
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last
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the last
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 2 decades and
expectation
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expectations
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 in 2029.
Overall
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,
Finance
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 contributed
highest
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the highest
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 in
past
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the past
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 2 decades, and
same
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the same
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 can
been
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be
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 seen in future.
In
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On
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 the flip side, manufacturing and
food
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 processing shares least throughout. Natural resources and
tourism
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 added
same
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the same
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number
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amount
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 to
GDP
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 in these 30 years. In
year
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the year
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 2009,
Finance
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 was
on
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apply
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the top contributed 40% in economy.
Tourism
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 and natural
reaources
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resources
 made
same
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the same
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contribuation
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contribution
 to
Gdp
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 which was 25%,
whereas
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 manufacturing contributed about 20%. In
this
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 decade,
least
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the least
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 contribution was by
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food
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the food
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 processing sector
about
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, about
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 10%. In 2019,
finance
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 and natural resources shares most in
economy
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the economy
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, 35% and 30% respectively.
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, only 15% was contributed by manufacturing.
Food
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 processing and
tourism
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 showed
similar
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a similar
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 trend of 20% shares.  Predictions of 2029, it is predicted that
finance
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 will be
highest
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the highest
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 contributing industry to
GDP
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about
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, about
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 40%.
However
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, manufacturing and
food
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 processing are expected to give
less
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lower
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 numbers
about
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, about
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 10% and 5% respectively.
Tourism
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 and natural resources will share 20% and 25% respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words finance, food, tourism, gdp with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • money
  • dollars
  • spend
  • spent
  • percent
  • period
  • time
  • part
  • share
  • big
  • small
  • more
  • less
  • rise
  • fall
  • grow
  • drop
  • up
  • down
  • stay
  • same
  • change
  • pattern
  • compare
  • compared
  • with
  • in
  • these
  • years
  • first
  • second
  • largest
  • smallest
  • period 1
  • period 2
  • tourist
  • travel
  • visit
  • money spent
  • overall
  • total
  • other
  • which
  • the
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