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Writing Samples
Band 4

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ................. ,

Dear Sandeep, I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you that I will be working for six months from our Company's Dublin head office. My brother lives there
and
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 he needs my support to help him
in
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 medical condition. As I will be in
different
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a different
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time
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 zone,
cordinating
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coordinating
 would be
bit
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a bit
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 difficult
but
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, but
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 I have planned
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an
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 alternate arrangement for it. During my
stay
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stay,
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 I will
login
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log in
 during
night
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 here and log off at
same
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the same
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time
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 as IST
time
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 zone. I will make sure I am always available during work hours
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time
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 zone won't affect my work quality. I need your help in arranging IT support so that my laptop works in another country. Please find my documents with
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 letter for
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further
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the further
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 approval process. I would be
greatful
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grateful
 if you
can
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 support me during
this
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 process. I look forward to your response. Thanking you Yours faithfully Raj

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task response
Task response: say more clearly why you want to work in Dublin head office, not only about your brother. Add how this work can help you and the company.
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Task response: explain your work plan in a more clear way. Say who can help your team, how you will join meetings, and how you will finish key tasks.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: use clearer linking words like First, Also, and Finally. This will make your ideas easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: keep one main idea in each paragraph. One paragraph for reason, one for work plan, and one for your request.
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Task response: you answer all three parts of the task.
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Task response: your tone is polite and right for a letter to a manager.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: the letter has a clear opening and ending.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: your ideas are in a good order from reason to plan to request.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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