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Some people believe that education success is based on good teachers and other believe that it depends on students attitude. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Student
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 action and
teacher
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approach
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 both have a crucial role
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 learner performance. When judging
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how well
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student
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students
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 learn , it should not mainly
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be decided
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 by how long teachers teach or how late students stay up to review their
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 , but rather measured by how well
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student
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students
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 take
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in information
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 and
able
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are able
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 to understand it
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Teacher
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 play
significant
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a significant
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 role
on
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 how well information
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 from
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the educator
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 to
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the learner
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,
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 a good
teacher
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 should provide a clear and
well understand
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well-understood
lesson
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.
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Teacher
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Teachers
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 have different
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approach
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approaches
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 and every new
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 shaped
student
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 perspective of the
subject
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it
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itself
self
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 and the
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. A Great
teacher
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 should not only make
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lesson
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 well
understand
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 but
also
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 should make
learner
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learners
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 love the
subject
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it
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Student
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 attitude
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also
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 tied to how well they want to absorb the
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are they
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whether they are
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 optimistic or pessimistic
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are optimistic
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 they tend to be eager learning the lessons. Some even want to know more
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 that leads to outside class learning ,
they
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where they
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 find out the answer
for
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to
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 what they want to know.
but
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 if they
being
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 pessimistic about the
subject
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it
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 , the perspective on how they view the material
are
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 not good . Maybe they view that the
subject
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 is hard or too deep for them ,
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this
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 could lead to
resistant
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resistance
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class
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teacher
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teachers
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approach
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student
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 play a main part on how
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student
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students
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 feel , and
student
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 feeling affected directly on how they perceive the
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 and the
eager
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eagerness
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it
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task response
Answer both sides more clearly. You talk about teachers and students, but your own view should be more direct.
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Add one or two clear examples to support your ideas. This will make your points stronger.
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Write a short introduction that shows the topic, and a clear ending that gives your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Put ideas in a clearer order. Start with one main idea, then explain it, then give an example.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like 'first', 'also', 'however', and 'in conclusion' to guide the reader.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph stay on one main point. This will make the essay easier to follow.
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You discuss both teachers and student attitude, so you understand the main question.
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Your main ideas are relevant to the topic and easy to see.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has separate paragraphs for different ideas, which helps the reader.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences connect teacher approach and student feeling in a logical way.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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