Some people think having a university degree is the best way to secure a good job. However, others believe skills and experience are more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

It is widely believed that
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and
experience
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in
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importance over the
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decades
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regarding safeguarding a desired
job
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in comparison to the importance of third-level qualifications. I won't neglect the impact of abilities and work
experience
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on achieving
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goal.
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However
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I suggest that a
bachelors
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bachelor's
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degree
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or even a
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master's
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degree
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is still more indispensable than any skill or
experience
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. Not only is a third-level qualification often the first impression of a candidate
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it is
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often a requirement that must be fulfilled to be able to apply.
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even
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though
if
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apply
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someone presents an incredible curriculum
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with brilliant
skills
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but no university
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degree
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degree,
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they might
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be considered as an
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eligible
or suitable candidate for the position.
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, work
experience
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and
skills
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are
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utterly essential
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more relevant for step two of the recruiting process. If a person were invited to attend an
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interview,
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they would be required to speak about their previous positions and
skills
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that ideally would give rise to them being the perfect fit for the
job
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. Were someone to present a perfect college
degree
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but no
experience
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or communication
skills
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none
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, none
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so ever they would not obtain a
job
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offer. In conclusion, it is justified to argue
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that a
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good university
degree
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is more often associated with achieving a great position since it is more helpful in the light of receiving an invitation for an interview than
experience
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and
skills
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.
Witout
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Without
one
you
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, you
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might miss the opportunity for your dream
job
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due to
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the fact that you didn't
furfill
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fulfil
the formal requirements for the offered position. What
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academic band score would I get

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task response
Answer both sides more fully. You talk more about the degree side than the skills side.
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Add one clear example for each main idea. This will make your points stronger.
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Make your opinion very clear in the introduction and keep it the same to the end.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer topic sentences at the start of each body paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like 'first', 'also', 'however', and 'for example'.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are too long and hard to follow. Break them into shorter parts.
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You answer the main question and give your own view.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, body, and end.
coherence and cohesion
You use paragraphing well.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • competitive advantage
  • in-depth knowledge
  • theoretical understanding
  • networking opportunities
  • prerequisite
  • professions
  • practical, hands-on knowledge
  • perform tasks efficiently and effectively
  • actual ability
  • deliver results
  • problem-solving
  • communication
  • teamwork
  • real-world settings
  • blend of both education and practical experience
  • theoretical concepts
  • ideal scenario
  • bolstered by practical application
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