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Band 6.5

The bar graph below shows the percentage growth in average property prices in three different countries between 2007 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart provides key information about how the average of
bulidings
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building
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 prices
riseing
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rising
 in
Algeria
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,
China
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 and
Argentina
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 in a period of three years.
Overall
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,
Algeria
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 was going down in each year,
while
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China
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 was increasing
stably
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steadily
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,
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also
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and
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Argentina
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 at the beginning had
rised
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risen
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, but went down again.
According to
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 what is shown,
Algeria
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 had the
bigest
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biggest
 number in 2007 with just over 6%,
comparing
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compared
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 with
Argentina
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, which was closer to
Algeria
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 than
China
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with
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, with
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 almost half
from
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of
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 what
Algeria
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 reached, and
China
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 only had 2% in the same year. In
2008
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2008,
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 things were different
than
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from
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 2007
, the
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. The
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 percentages were similar between the countries, starting with
Argentina
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, which had the largest percentage it nearly reached 5%
and
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, and
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 about
China
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 and
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Algeria
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Algeria,
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 they were between 4% and 5%. In
tems
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terms
 of 2009, things had changed,
China
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grow
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grew
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 from approximately 4% to more than 5%,
while
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Algeria
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fall
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fell
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 to nearly 3%,
Argentina
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 declined sharply
and
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, and
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 it almost gets to 1%.
Moreover
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, in 2010,
China
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 was
stil
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still
 the largest with a percentage
more
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of more
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 than 6%, whilst
Algeria
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 and
Argentina
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 were less than half
than
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of
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 what
China
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 reached.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words algeria, china, argentina with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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