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Writing Samples
Band 2

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new fast trains between cities. others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In some countries,people think it is important to spend a lot of
money
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 on
bulilding
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building
 new fast
trains
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 between
cities
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.Others believe the budget should be spent on improving local
transport
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.From my perspective,
the
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apply
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 both
of idea
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ideas
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 should
support
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be supported
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 by goverment.
To begin
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 with,investing in public
transport
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 reduces traffic congestion.People from
works
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work
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 and schools will be tired and wait
public
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for public
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transport
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.The best solution to innovate new
techology
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technology
 and reduce traffic
jam
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jams
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.
For example
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,big
cities
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 have
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this
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a
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 problem
about
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with
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 local people and tourists.Goverment invest
money
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for
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in
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transport
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like
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, like
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 one of the bus for
tourist
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tourists
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 and
other
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others
 for residents.
Moreover
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,it helps
for
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the
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 economic development of
country
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the country
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and
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, and
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 tourists always come back
all time
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again and
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 again. Another key aspect is the conctructing new fast
trains
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 between
cities
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 offers more
money
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, because
to create
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creating
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trains
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spend
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takes
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 about 2-5 years depend on
company
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the company
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 building.
However
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,
this
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 is idea help to
transporting
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transport
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 goods and tourists.For
instanse
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instance
,in
the
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apply
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Switzerland
goverments
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, goverments
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 use the new fast
trains
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 between
cities
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 to develop
economy
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the economy
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.To attract other nations to
visite
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visit
 popular
cities
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 and spend
money
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 to buy things and for the
entertaiment
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entertainment
.
To sum up
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,these ideas really support good economic growth for
both of
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apply
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transport
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.In my opinion,it
is depend
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depends
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 on the
finance
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finances
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 of goverment and life standart cost
.
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of living standards.
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task response
Answer both sides more clearly, then give one strong opinion in all parts of the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Make each main idea easy to see. Use one topic sentence, then explain it, then give one example.
task response
Your ideas are sometimes too general. Add clearer reasons and say how they connect to the question.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words carefully, such as first, however, for example, and in conclusion.
task response
The conclusion should repeat your opinion in a direct way, not only say it depends.
task response
You discuss both views: local transport and fast trains.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
task response
You try to use examples from cities and Switzerland.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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