Some people think that it's good for a country's culture if people watch some imported film or TV programs while some people argue that it could be better if people watch films of their own culture. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There is no doubt that these days watching
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documentaries
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films
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about
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is very
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important
as the development and technology make our
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mixed or
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people
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think that watching other
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countries'
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culture
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is good,
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the other
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others
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think that
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better to watch
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their
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films. In
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essay, I am going to discuss both
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of view
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then
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give my opinion. In
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of the benefit of seeing other
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culture
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cultures
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,
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the communities
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. The main reason given to support
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world. To illustrate,if
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know other
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people
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people's
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culture
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and why they have it
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, they
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will accept other
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as they are without forcing them to change.
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, knowing that Muslims are not getting their
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name and to give the woman the
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respect
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and how it is treat female.
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the other hand, some
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feel that they should watch their own
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only is
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better.
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to all
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, we can see
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generation eating, dressing, acting the same as they have the same
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to the point that they
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or do not know their own
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make
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watching their own
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more important to save it
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disappearing in each generation.
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, answering
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, as some
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think that watching
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their
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films
have
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more
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,
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thiks
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think
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opposite
. Balancely, I believe that watching
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culture
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film epically for
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generation is better than watching
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others
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others'
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culture
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Answer both sides more clearly. Say why each side is good, then give your view in a direct way.
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Give one more clear idea for each body part. This will make your answer more full.
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Use examples that are easy to understand and clearly linked to your main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Make your topic sentence clear at the start of each part. This helps the reader follow your plan.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, however, and for example.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are hard to follow. Keep sentences shorter and put one main idea in each sentence.
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You discuss both views and you give your opinion at the end.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, two main parts, and a conclusion.
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You try to use an example to support your idea.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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