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The line graph shows the percentage of spending in a European country from 1960 to 2000

The graph compares five categories
which
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in which
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 people spent
money
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 in
euro
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euros
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 between 1960 and 2000.
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Overall
Punctuation problem
Overall,
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 there was a gradual
decrease
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 in almost all sectors except transport.
as
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As
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 the graph
shows
Punctuation problem
shows,
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 European people
spend
Wrong verb form
spent
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 the most average
of
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amount of
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money
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 on food at about 32% in 1960.
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then
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Then
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this
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 figure experienced a sharp
decrease
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 to below 15% in 2000.
the
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The
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percentage
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 of spending
money
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 on leisure was 12
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then
Punctuation problem
, then
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 fell to 11 in 2000.
there
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There
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 was a gradual
decrease
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 in
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percentage
Correct article usage
the percentage
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 of spending
money
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 on closing and energy.
the
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The
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percentage
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 of spending closing was 10%
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then
Punctuation problem
, then
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 fell to 5%, energy was 5%
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then
Punctuation problem
, then
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decrease
Wrong verb form
decreased
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 to 0% from 1960 to 2000
do
Punctuation problem
,
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while
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 all categories expected
decreasing
Replace the word
a decrease in
 the
percentage
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 of spending transport growth from 9% to 15%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, decrease, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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