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The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the UK from 1997 to 2001

The graph compares five categories of houses with different types of technology in the UK between 1997 and 2001.
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overall
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, the
percentage
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 of city players and computers was slightly increased,
while
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 others had
sharply
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a sharp
 growth.
Is
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 the ground shows, the
percentage
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 of
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household
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households
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 with Internet was the lowest at about 10% in 1997.
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then
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this
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 figure experience is rapid
increased
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increase
 to 60% in 2001.
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Household
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Households
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 with
telephone
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a telephone
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 had the same
increasing
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increase
 as
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household
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households
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 with Internet, but it was 10% higher in 1997 and 2001.
there
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 was
a original gross in the
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an increase in the gross
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percentage
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 of households with CD and computers from 60% and 40% to 80% and 70% from 1997 to 2001. The
percentage
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 of
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household
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households
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 with DVD players experienced a slight decrease from 25% in 1997 to 15% in 1998.
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then
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Then
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this
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 figure significantly increased to 50% in 2001.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, household with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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