You have been working in a company for the last two years. Recently, your computer in the office has started giving some problems and it is affecting your work performance. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, describe the problem explain how it is affecting your work write what you want him to do regarding it You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Manager, I am writing to inform you about the malfunction of my computer
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started
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week. For the
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two
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I have never
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any technical issues with my computer
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until
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week,
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when it
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started making
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noise
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trying to turn it on,
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moreover
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the software is taking twice the normal time to start and sometimes shows a blue screen when I try to force it. I tried cleaning the device
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any virus with the help of the technical team
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resulted in failure as we could not fix it.
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, I end up
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more time on the technical problems rather than completing my tasks and
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my daily goal, which has dramatically affected my performance. I kindly request
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that you change my computer as fixing it is no longer an option
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our technician, and
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earliest convenvience as I want to increase my performance once again. Thank you for your prompt attention to
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I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Susan Bolt

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task response
For task response: You answer all parts of the task, but add a bit more clear detail about how the problem stops your work each day.
task response
For task response: Ask in a more clear way for a new computer or fast repair.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are in a good order, but some long sentences are hard to follow. Use shorter sentences.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Start each paragraph with one main point and keep all support for that one point in the same paragraph.
task response
For task response: You describe the computer problem, its effect on work, and what you want the manager to do.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear opening and a polite ending.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technical difficulties
  • Productivity
  • Deadlines
  • Software glitches
  • Upgrading
  • Hardware malfunction
  • Work disruption
  • Commitment
  • Swift action
  • Consulting
  • Thorough checkup
  • Resolving
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