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Some people believe that it is the residents that are responsible for the cleaning nd tidying the streets . While others believe it is the responsibility of government . Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Introduction
It is widely acknowledged that the residents are responsible for
the
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apply
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cleaning and tidying the
streets
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.
whereas
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 others believe it is the
governments
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government's
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responsibility
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. 
Body · 1
While
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 it is true that the residents
has
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have
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 the main
responsibility
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 to tidy up the
streets
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, and ensure it is livable for all individuals.
Citizens
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 should respect and take care of the
palce
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place
where they live. 
Body · 2
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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 the community should
held
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be held
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 responsible
keeping
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for keeping
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 the
streets
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 clean and tidy.
Body · 3
From a long term
perspective
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perspective,
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 I consider the
goverment
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government
 should have the primary
responsibility
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, as people do not always manage to
fulfill
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fulfil
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 their duties and need consequences if they fail to do so.
Body · 4
Altough
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Although
 some
citizens
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 manage to
fulfill
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 their duties, not all
citizens
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 are capable of taking that huge
resposability
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responsibility
 to keep the
streets
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 clean.
Conclusion
Taking everything into
account
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account,
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 I consider that
citizens
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 should clean og tidy up after
them self
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themselves
, and the community should have some rules for
induviduals
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individuals
 to follow, but the
goverment
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government
 should have the primary
responsibility
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 to ensure it will be done.

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task response
Answer both sides more fully. Say why some people think people should clean the streets, and why some think the government should do it.
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Give a clear opinion in the introduction and keep the same view to the end.
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Add one or two simple examples to support your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear paragraphing: one paragraph for side one, one for side two, and one for your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like 'first', 'also', 'however', and 'in the end'.
coherence and cohesion
Make each main point larger. Right now, some ideas are very short and not well explained.
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You answered the main topic and gave your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
There is a short introduction and a clear ending.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are easy to follow in most parts.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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