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The map below shows the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014.

The maps provided the alterations that took place at the waterfront area of a town known as Darwin during the period from 2009 to 2014.
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, it can be clearly seen that several changes have taken place, with the school and sea being the most noticeable ones. One of the most important changes was the school in 2009, which was located in the northern corner of the map. Some facilities,
such
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 as the community centre and lake, were close to it,
while
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 the swimming pool and fishing areas were far from it. In 2014, the school was relocated to be built vocationally. Another significant change was the sea, which was situated in the eastern part of the map in 2009. Some services were near it,
such
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 as the swimming pool and fishing area,
while
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 the industrial area was farther away. In 2014, it was demolished to be built into a harbour.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such, while".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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