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Band 5

The diagram below shows the production of olive oil. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows how olive oil is made in seven steps.
First,
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olives are taken from trees by hand and put into baskets.
Then
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, they are washed in cold water.
Next,
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a belt carries the olives to a machine where they are smashed into a paste
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 the stones are removed. After that, the olive paste is put into bags with holes and pressed to get the liquid out.
This
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 liquid is
then
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 put into a tank where the oil and water are separated.
Finally
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, the oil is stored in a building and
then
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 sent to shops to be sold.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Harvesting - the process of collecting ripe fruits, such as olives, from trees.
  • Rinsing - washing thoroughly with water to clean away debris or impurities.
  • Crushing - smashing or grinding something into small pieces or a paste.
  • Paste - a thick, soft mixture formed by crushing olives.
  • Pressing - the act of applying force to extract liquid.
  • Centrifuge - a machine that separates substances of different densities by spinning them rapidly.
  • Filtering - the process of removing impurities or unwanted particles from a liquid.
  • Bottling - packaging liquid in bottles for storage or sale.
  • Impurities - unwanted or foreign substances within a mixture.
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