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Band 2.5

The plans show the room layout for training session for up ten people and more that ten people.

The maps below illustrate two different versions of layout for the training session
room
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: for up to ten people and more
that
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than
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 ten people.
Overall
Linking Words
, it is clear from these layouts that most of the differences are
on
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in
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 the placement of infrastructures inside the
room
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.
The major
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Most
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 of them is on the location of
morning
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the morning
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 tea area. On the first plan (A), which was designed for ten people, we can see that there are 10 desks and chairs
on
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in
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 the middle of the
room
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, south of which is
morning
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the morning
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 tea located. On the south,
regarding
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the
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,
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apply
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 presenter's chair and white board were situated, the former on the western side of the
room
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, and the latter on the east. Meanwhile, on the second plan (B
)
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),
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morning tea is located on the north-west corner of the
room
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, next to where white board and
presenter's
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the presenter's
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 chair
situated
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are situated
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, with the former on the north, and the latter on the bottom. Desks are located closer to the south, with
larger
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a larger
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 number of chairs around them.

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task response
Task response: Say more main changes in the two plans. You talk about the tea area, but you should also clearly compare the desks, chairs, and front area.
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Task response: Some details are not fully clear. For example, say exactly where each item is, and how many seats there are in each plan.
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Task response: Check small word errors like 'more that ten' and 'the major of them'. These make your meaning less clear.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your essay has a clear start and an overview, which is good. But some sentences are hard to follow because the word order is not natural.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use simple link words well, like 'in plan A', 'in plan B', 'while', and 'in contrast'. This will make the compare easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Put similar ideas together in one part. For example, write one part for plan A and one part for plan B, or one part for seats and one part for the front area.
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Task response: You give an overview, and this is very important in Task 1.
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Task response: You include key parts of the room, such as desks, chairs, tea area, white board, and presenter's chair.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The essay has a basic paragraph structure with an opening, an overview, and detail parts.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: You use compare words like 'meanwhile' and show that you try to link ideas.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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