The table shows how patients evaluation services in three health centres. The results are recodlly from 1 to 10.

Overall
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, when we compared with the centres, we can see a pattern.
Peveril
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achievelly high
score
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in most services,
while
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Longston
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preform
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performed
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poorly.
Marchbank
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is between them. For booking appointments,
Peveril
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has
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score
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scored
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9.1, compared with 7.8 in
Marchbank
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and 5.2 in
Longston
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, which is
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considerably
lower. For
doctors
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doctors'
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service,
Peveril
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also
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is also
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high (8.7),
while
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Longston
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is 8.0 and
Marchbank
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is lower. For
care
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the care
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of children, the scores are close, but
Peveril
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is slightly higher than
Marchbank
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, and
Longston
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is lower. In pharmacy,
Peveril
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achievelly better
score
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,
while
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Longston
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again concedrly lower
.
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score.
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For response to concerns,
Peveril
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has
highest
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the highest
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score
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(9.6), but
Longston
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preform poorly with 4.3. In conclusion,
Peveril
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is highest in
overall
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evaluation,
Marchbank
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is middle, and
Longston
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is lowest.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words peveril, score, longston, marchbank with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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