Write a letter of invitation to your parents. In the letter: – Explain that you have completed your studies – Give details of the event, including time, date and dress code – Let them know how many tickets they have and who they are for?
Dear April,
How are you? I hope you're doing well. Actually, I've finished all of my classes
this
semester. It was really tough for me, but I could manage all my classes.
By the way, I bought tickets yesterday. So, I really want to invite you to watch a soccer game together in Japan. It will be held on April, 23. I think it will kick off from 7pm, so I'll pick you up at your house at 6pm. You can wear whatever you want. ButLinking Words
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if you can wear a soccer uniform, it's better.
Honestly, I have three tickets. So, if you want to invite your friend, just let me know. ButPunctuation problem
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these tickets should be for my mother and father.
I hope you could reply to my message as soon as possible. Take care of yourself
My parents,
Kazuya NakagawaPunctuation problem
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Task response: Write to your parents, not to April. The reader is wrong now.
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Task response: Say clearly that you finished your studies, not only classes this semester.
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Task response: The tickets part is not clear. Say how many tickets, and say they are for your mother and father.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The ideas are in a fair order, but the soccer game does not match the study event.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use one clear idea in each part: finish study, event details, tickets.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Start and end the letter in the same way. Use 'Dear Mom and Dad' and end with 'Love' or 'Best wishes'.
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Task response: You gave time, date, and dress code.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has short paragraphs, so it is easy to read.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Some linking words are used, like 'By the way' and 'Honestly'.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite