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Band 5.5

Your neighbours have a dog that is noisy at night. You can’t sleep due to this. Write a letter to your neighbours. In your letter: describe the problem with the dog explain why it is important for you to sleep outline what your neighbours could do about the situation

Dear Mr Singh, I am writing to bring your attention to your dog
who
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 makes noise throughout the night.
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 the dog is quite lovely, she has been barking for the
last
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one
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month. I believe that she may feel anxious at
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night, perhaps because she has recently started sleeping alone in the backyard.
Due to
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heavy
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 workload, it is crucial for me to get a good sleep. I can neither concentrate
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 my work nor feel energetic
in
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 the day because of sleep disturbance. If
this
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 continues, I
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 experience some predicaments in the long run. It is advisable that you
could
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visit a clinic
to
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for a
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 check-up for her health to ensure she does not have
some
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 health problems.
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, I
also
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 had a dog a few years ago who had a similar problem. It was
due to
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 feeling afraid at
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night
while
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 sleeping alone. I am looking forward to your positive consideration. Yours sincerely, Rupinder Kaur

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but some ideas need to be more clear and direct.
task response
Task response: Say more exactly what the neighbours can do, like keep the dog inside at night or ask a vet for help.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter is easy to follow, but some lines sound a bit hard or not natural.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use simple linking words like because, so, and also to make your ideas flow better.
task response
Task response: You cover the problem, why sleep is important, and what they can do.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Each paragraph has one main idea.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • noisy
  • disruptive
  • affecting sleep
  • vital
  • important
  • well-being
  • productivity
  • neighbors
  • training
  • solution
  • noise-reducing device
  • barking
  • disturbance
  • tolerance
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