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The bar chart below shows the daily average hours of teacher spent on five different during a typical week.

The bar
chart
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demonstrat
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demonstrates
 the daily average time
of
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a
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 teacher
spent
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spends
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 on five different
during
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activities during
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 a typical week
Overall
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,the peak
chart
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 is Teaching morover the fall
chart
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 is other tasks
the
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. The
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 first
chart
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take
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takes
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 3.5
hours
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and
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, and
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 the fall
chart
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take
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takes
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 1.5
hours
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. Teching take 3.5
hours
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in
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apply
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a day
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also
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, also
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 the
socend
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second
chart
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take
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takes
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 3
hours
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in
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apply
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a day
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. Moreover,
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moreover
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 the
midel
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middle
 is meeting, meetings is btween the lesson preparation and
superivsing
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supervising
 students
, meetings
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. Meetings
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 take 2
hours
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 aftr meetings is supercising students it is take between 2 and 1.5
hours
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, the
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. The
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last
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 one is
other
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another
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 task
it
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, it
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 is take beetwen 1.5 and 1
hours
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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