The table below gives information about a restaurant’s average sales in three different branches in 2016.

The table

show

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shows

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information about sales in three restaurant branches in Vancouver

2016

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in 2016

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(on

Georgia

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Street

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Dunsmuir

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Street

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and

Drake

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Street

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)

Overall

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, the highest number of transactions had

Georgia

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Street

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while

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Drake

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Street

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had the lowest. Each branch had

different

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most popular meal.

Firstly

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Georgia

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Street

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had 854 transactions, which is more than

Dunsmuir

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Street

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with 750 and

Drake

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Street

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with 390. The transaction value was highest in

Georgia

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Street

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at 10.69$, but

Dunsmuir

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Street

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had the lowest

only

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5.61$.

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, the number of eat-in and take-away transactions was

also

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different.

Georgia

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Street

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had 405 eat-in and 449 take-away orders.

Dunsmuir

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Street

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had

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fewer

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eat-in, about 358, and more take-away, 392.

Drake

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Street

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had the smallest numbers in both of the categories. The most popular food in

Georgia

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street

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Street

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was chicken burger,

Dunsmuir

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Street

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was famous

with

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for

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chicken wings and

Drake

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Street

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with

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was famous for

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their chicken pasta

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Mar 28, 2026

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words georgia, street, dunsmuir, drake with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

147 words

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