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The diagram shows the world production output from Asia, Europe, and the rest of the world in different years.

The given logical bar chart compares and describes the
gobal
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global
 production rates mainly in the continents of
Asia
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 and
Europe
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 ,and other
remain
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remaining
 countries
in the
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worldwide between 1840 and 2000. Units are measured in percentages. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is evident that
,
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Asia
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 had showcased the highest performance at the beginning ,
while
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 all
the
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three participants displayed
a
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solid fluctuations.
On the other hand
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,
rest
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the rest
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 of the world had
archievd
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achieved
 an immense growth compared to the past decades.
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, dominated by an excellent
legacy
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 both
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Asia
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the Asia
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 and
Europe
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 regions secured the first and the second until 1920. More importantly, in 1840
Asia
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 stood at
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half,and at the same time
Europe
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 secured 40% from the
world
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 whole production. More pathetically,
Asia
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 had been followed by a downward trend till 1920 ,which limited its production
at
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 one-fifth. In comparison,
Europe
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 had not failed to
rose
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 to 50% in the same period. More positively,
Asia
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grown
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 its capacity to
inclined
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 to just above 40% in 2000.
In contrast
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, other regions except
Asia
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 and
Europe
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,
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 stood at one-tenth in 1840 ,
while
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secured
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securing
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 nearly
two fifth
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two-fifths
 in the
forth
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fourth
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 wave. In that aspect, they reached
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their highest
achivement
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achievement
 in 1960 ,which was
equalent
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equivalent
 to
Europe
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’s.
Eventhough
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Even though
,
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 it
decrased
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decreased
 to nearly 30% ,was not
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 to beat
Europe
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 in 2000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words asia, europe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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