The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts illustrate Canada's four retail sector
sales
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via e-commerce in 2005 and 2010.
Overall
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, electronics and appliances retailers recorded the highest online
sales
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in 2005 and 2010
years
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.
In contrast
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, consumables and digital
entertainments
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businesses experienced the most significant increase in their online
sales
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.
While
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home furnishings
sales
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via the internet have reduced over time. In 2005, 35% of the country's online purchases were from technology device and equipment merchants, a figure that fell slightly in 2010 to 30%.
By comparison
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,
sales
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of food and beverage retailers via the web saw a growth from 22% in 2005 to 32% in 2010. Selling video games online was
also
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widespread and grew considerably. Specifically, the percentages rose from 18% in 2005 to 23% after five years.
On the other hand
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, e-commerce home goods witnessed a substantial decline in its share of
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, falling form 25% in 2005 to 15% in 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • percentage
  • sector
  • sales figures
  • revenue
  • growth
  • decline
  • stable
  • significant
  • leading
  • least performing
  • comparison
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • online shopping
  • retail sectors
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