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The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The table demonstrates the change of local and international
students
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 undertaking research between 2001 and 2010,
while
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 the pie diagrams compare the share of junior
researcher
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researchers
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 categorising under their gender in the same period. In general, both national and overseas
students
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 increase significantly in the period of question, meanwhile local dominates the proportion of young
scientiest
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scientists
overall
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. Taking a closer look at the table, it can be observed that the actual number of young researcher rise noticeably in ten years.
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 the majority of them were local
students
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, the growth of non-local were the highest, which jumped to triple
of
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its original figure in a decade.
According to
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 the graphs, in 2001, amounting to 87%, the local researcher were lead the share of
overall
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 young experts, which the proportion male and female were a few differences
.
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in the proportions of males and females.
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 Ten years later, in comparison, the
global
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number of global
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students
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 doubled
its figure
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, representing a significant rise.
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, the female group showed a considerable growth, which tripled its share
afterall
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after all
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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