Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The given map illustrates two potential locations
of
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constructing
new
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a new
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shopping
center
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in Brandfield. In general, both of the proposed locations will be able to attract an immense
customers
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number of customers
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as they
could
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be accessed via transport infrastructure and
near
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are near
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the city centre. Taking a closer look at the diagram, the first site (S1) will be built in the northern area, a strategic location near the residential zone and
a
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city centre, which are most likely
attract
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to attract
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the local buyers.
This
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feasible site provides direct access to the mall via a railway and a motorway, offering a convenient, yet
,
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accessible, store for many customers.
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,
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site will show a beautiful view of the
water-front
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waterfront
city as it
stand
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next to the river. In comparison, S2
,
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is predicted to be developed in the southern outskirts,
approximate
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approximately
to the industrial zone, which will be more
convinence
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convenient
for the workers and the outside buyers.
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,
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spot is well connected to
nearby
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the nearby
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area, as it is surrounded by the railway and two roads.
Nonetheless
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,
this
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mall is predicted to be less strategic as it
far
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is far
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away from the housing zone.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • residential area
  • industrial zone
  • city center
  • main road
  • benefits
  • convenience
  • traffic congestion
  • accessibility
  • workers
  • compare
  • differences
  • pros and cons
  • suitable
  • analysis
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