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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

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The bar
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 illustrates how frequently
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residents
 in the USA ate in fast food restaurants, namely every day, several
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 a
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, once or twice a month, a few
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 a year, and never, over a 10-year period, between 2003 and 2013.
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, it is evident that the proportion of once a
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 and that of once or twice a month dominated the
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,
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 the percentage of everyday and never showed the lowest figures. Looking first at once a
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 and once or twice a month, we can observe that the former dominated the
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 from 2003 to 2013,
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 the latter increased considerably and became the highest figure with roughly 33% in 2013 by the end of the period. Moving on to several
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 a
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, and a few
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 a
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, the percentage of the former
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experienced
 a rise,
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 a decline at roughly 16%,
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 that of the latter remained relatively stable at 15%.
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, the percentage of every day and never was the lowest
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 with an average below 5%.The
chart
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 below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, times, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast food consumption
  • Frequency
  • Dining trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Peak periods
  • Downward/upward trend
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Economic impact
  • Health implications
  • Convenience foods
  • Eating habits
  • Statistical evidence
  • Year-over-year comparison
  • Fluctuation
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