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In many workplaces, online communication is getting more common than meeting face to face. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, many aspects of life have changed compared to the past, and one of the most significant changes is technology
like
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 meeting online
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 of
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face to
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face-to-face
face
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.
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, there are some advantages and disadvantages
for
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 online
communication
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This
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 essay will show two benefits and a drawback.
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 with, one positive point for online
communication
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 is
less
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lower
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 cost than
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face to
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face-to-face
face
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communication
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, because we do not need
place
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a place
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 for
meetings
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, equipment, or others.
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, we can meet online from any location.
In addition
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, online
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 saves time, since we
could
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 meet from our
house
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houses
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 or other cities.
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, most companies might
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hold
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meetings
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 online. Another positive point is
online
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that online
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communication
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 is more flexible than
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face to
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face-to-face
face
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meetings
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. It can be possible to say that
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face to
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face-to-face
face
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meetings
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 need to be prepared like clothes, time before
meetings
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, transport, and others.
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, online
meetings
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 are easier
for recording
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to record
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 or meeting summaries by tools that use AI.
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, some advanced companies do a lot of tasks in
meeting
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meetings
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 automatically
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 of humans.
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 online
communication
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 has some benefits, it has a drawback
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such
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, such
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 as it could miss human society
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that is
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 considered vital for humans, to
it might
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apply
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build good
relationship
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relationships
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 that has positive effect
for
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on
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 meeting members, and it
help
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helps
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 to develop work
by
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through
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 cooperation.
it
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 considers
result
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the result
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 of vital relationships. By way of conclusion, both methods of
communication
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 have advantages and disadvantages
,
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however
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, the online advantages
outweigh the disadvantages that
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that outweigh the disadvantages, such as
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 lower cost and more
flexible
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flexibility
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task response
Answer the main question more directly. Say clearly why the good points are stronger than the bad point.
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Add more clear support for each main idea. Explain how lower cost and time saving help work in real life.
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Use more specific examples. 'Most companies' is too general. Give one clear work example.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each paragraph. This will make your essay easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas more clearly with simple words like 'first', 'also', 'however', and 'therefore'.
coherence and cohesion
The disadvantage paragraph is hard to understand. Write shorter sentences and make the point clear.
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You answered both sides of the question and gave your opinion in the end.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
task response
The two advantages are easy to see: lower cost and more freedom.
Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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