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Nowadays many people choose ready-made food and refuse to cook at home, why and what are the advantages/disadvantages?

In today's
fast-phased
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fast-paced
 world, it is
noticable
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noticeable
 that
people
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 often prefere ready to eat meals rather than preparing healthy
home made
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homemade
food
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.
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 trend
mainly
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due to
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busy
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 lifestyle.
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 ready-made
food
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provide
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provides
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 certain benefits
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such
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 as saving time, but they
also
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have
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 drawbacks
including
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health
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 concerns.
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this
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 trend
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 its pros and cons. One of the primary
reason
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reasons
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people
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 prefer ready-made
food
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 is the lack of time.
with
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 long working
hours
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 individuals face difficulties
to manage
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 their daily activities
such
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 as cleaning, sleeping, travelling, etc.
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,
ready to eat
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a ready-to-eat
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 meal is
more
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 convenient and swift solution, as it requires minimal
preparations
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preparation
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.
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,
this
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 type of
food
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packages
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 is easily available in every
suppermarket
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supermarket
 or
convenient
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convenience
 store.
People
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 or students who are unaware of cooking can take advantage of
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. There are many advantages of eating already prepared meals, but there are certain disadvantages.
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, most of the
food
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 companies add chemicals to increase the
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food
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 life,
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 as
presevatives
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preservatives
.
This
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 kind of chemical and added fats have a major impact on human
health
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. Regular consumption of
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 can lead to
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 issues like heart disease or obesity.
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, cooking healthy
food
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 at home
have
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 its advantages,
such
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 as cooking with peers or family establishes more deep bond. In conclusion,
people
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's first preference is ready-made
food
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, which is more accessible and
easy
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 solution.
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offeres
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offers
 benefits,
disadvantes
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disadvantages
 outweigh more, particularly
people
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loss
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lose
 cooking skills
and
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 it is harmful to human
health
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.
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,
people
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 should choose
health
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 rather than convenience.

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task response
Answer both parts more fully. You say why people choose ready-made food, and you give pros and cons, but some ideas are short.
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Give one or two clear examples, like office workers, students, or families. This will make your ideas stronger.
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Explain each main point a bit more. For example, say why busy life leads to this choice, and how health problems may happen.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, middle, and end. Keep this simple structure.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words more carefully. Some are good, like 'Firstly' and 'Moreover', but some sentences do not join smoothly.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph focus on one main idea. The paragraph about pros and cons mixes ideas about ready-made food and home cooking.
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You answer the full question and talk about reasons, advantages, and disadvantages.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction gives a clear topic and plan for the essay.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion is clear and gives your final view.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ready-made food
  • home-cooked meals
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • variety
  • cooking skills
  • busy lifestyles
  • cost-effective
  • health benefits
  • quality ingredients
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