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The bar chart below shows number of seals, whales, and dolphins recorded in the gormez straits from to 2006 to 2018

The data displays the
amount
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number
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 of
individus
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individuals
 of different
spiecies
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species
 of Gomez straits marine wildlife counted between 2006 and 2018. What appears is that Whales population remained quite stable during
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 period,
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number
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the number
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 of seals
fluctuats
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fluctuates
while
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 dolphins had the most
remarable
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remarkable
 growth. Regarding the biggest
spiecie
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species
,
figues flutuated
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figs fluctuated
 by 3 to 4
individus
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individuals
 but remained around 25 during
this
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 douzain of years. In
contrat
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contrast
, Seals population has almost been
diminushed
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diminished
 by half as their
number
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felt
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fell
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 from more than 40 in 2006 to around 25 in 2010.
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, their
number
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 came back higher than its
inital
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initial
 point by
increasing
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an increase
 of 10
the
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in the
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 next four years and
an other
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another
 10 between 2014 and 2018.
Moreover
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,
Dolphins
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the
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number
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started
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of dolphins started
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 at around 15 in 2006
the
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, and
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 constantly rose to reach over 50 in
2018
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2018,
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 more than 3 times that in the beginning.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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