Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email. - recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn - explain how your friend could learn this sport - suggest that you both learn this sport together

Dear
my friend
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John, Hi, Jonh. I'm Junghoon. I have heard that you want to learn a new
sport
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. So, I would like to recommend
a
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golf
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as your new
sport
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and hobby. There are some reasons why I suggest
this
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sport
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to you.
First,
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you can get a feeling of calm and
relax
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relaxation
through playing
golf
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at the
golf
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resort where green grass is on the wide
ground
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with
picturesque
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a picturesque
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view. I know, you love peaceful and calming places.
Second,
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you can learn
this
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sport
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easily through
Youtube
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videos or online lectures. As you know, you need to
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a lot of money to learn
a
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golf
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but
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,
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that
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is
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a stereotype
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. If you take a class
at Youtube
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or online, you can save your money.
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, you usually need
some
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companion for
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golf-round
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a golf round
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. That's the reason why I suggest it to you. If you want to go to
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golf-round
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a golf round
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, I always go
to
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there together for our enjoyable
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golf-round
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golf round
. I will look forward to playing
golf
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with you at
beautiful
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the beautiful
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golf
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resort. Kindregard, Junghoon.

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task response
Answer all parts more clearly. Say why golf is good, how to learn it, and when you can learn it together.
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Use simple and clear examples. For example, say where you can take lessons in your town.
coherence and cohesion
Make each idea easy to follow. Put one main idea in one paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words well, like First, Also, Finally, and So.
coherence and cohesion
Check the order of your ideas. Some lines are hard to follow, like the part about golf-round.
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You answered the main topic and gave a clear sport choice.
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You gave reasons why golf fits your friend.
coherence and cohesion
Your email has a beginning, body, and ending.
coherence and cohesion
You used some linking words like First, Second, and Lastly.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • advice
  • recommend
  • suitable
  • learn
  • coach
  • lessons
  • tutorial videos
  • practice
  • tennis club
  • group
  • schedule
  • regularly
  • participants
  • tournaments
  • friendly matches
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