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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email. - recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn - explain how your friend could learn this sport - suggest that you both learn this sport together

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Dear John, Hi
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 John, I hope you're doing well. I heard that you want to learn a new sport, so I'd like to recommend
golf
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. I think it would suit you well because you like
outdoors
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the outdoors
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 and peaceful places. You can feel relaxed and calm through playing
golf
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. playing
golf
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 with fresh air and grass at
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golf
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a golf
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 course is always relaxing and enjoyable. To learn
golf
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,
You
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you
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 could start by watching
Youtube
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YouTube
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 videos. You don't have to
spent
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 a lot of money
for
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on
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 learning
golf
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. After watching that, you can go to
driving
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the driving
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 range near your place with your
golf
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 clubs. Once you hit the ball,
you're
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you'll
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 fall in love with
golf
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. Why don't we play
golf
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 together?
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golf
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Golf
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 is more fun when you play with someone. I'd be happy to join you
and
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 we can practice and suggest some good tips for improving our
golf
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 skills. I'm looking forward to playing
golf
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 with you at
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golf
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the golf
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 course. Kindregards Junghoon.

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coherence cohesion
Make your ideas link in a smoother way. Use simple link words like first, also, so, and finally.
coherence cohesion
Check small word form errors, like capital letters and verb forms, because they make the message less clear.
task achievement
Give one or two more clear details, like where you can learn or how often you can practice.
task achievement
Keep the tone friendly, but make the ending and greeting a little more natural and correct.
task achievement
You answered all parts of the task: you gave a sport, said how to learn it, and asked your friend to learn with you.
coherence cohesion
Your email has a clear beginning, middle, and ending, so it is easy to follow.
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The idea of golf fits your friend well because you explain that it is calm and outside.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advice
  • recommend
  • suitable
  • learn
  • coach
  • lessons
  • tutorial videos
  • practice
  • tennis club
  • group
  • schedule
  • regularly
  • participants
  • tournaments
  • friendly matches
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