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you have decided to leave your current job event though you enjoy it. write a letter to inform your manager of your decision. in your letter: tell the manager about yoyr decision and the reason for it, describe what you learnt in your current job, ask the manager to write a reference letter to help you with future employment

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I hope
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 letter finds you well. I am writing to formally inform you of my decision to resign from my position as a waiter at Rosy Restaurant.
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difficult
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 decision for me, as I have greatly enjoyed my time working here and I have learned so much from my experiences and colleagues. The reason for my resignation is that I would like to move house to another city with my family. I believe
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right
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the right
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 step for new opportunities, more convenient for my parents’ job and we
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 want to explore different cultures and ways of life. During my time working here, I have learned many valuable skills
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develop
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 effective communication and collaboration skills, customer service, making new friends, and how to handle
in
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challenging situations. Working at Rosy Restaurant
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 taught me the importance of
team work
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teamwork
 and adaptability in fast-paced environments. I would be grateful if you could provide me with a reference letter to support my future job applications. Your recommendation would be invaluable as I pursue new opportunities Thank you again for your support and guidance during my time working at Rosy Restaurant.

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but add one short line about when you will leave work.
task response
Task response: Keep the tone polite all the way. Add 'Dear Manager' at the start and 'Yours sincerely' at the end.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are clear, but some lines are a bit long. Use shorter sentences.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use simple link words like 'also', 'because', and 'so' to connect ideas more smoothly.
task response
Task response: You cover the reason for leaving, what you learned, and the request for a reference letter.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Each paragraph has one main idea, so the letter is easy to follow.
The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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