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Most people think that the truth should be objective rather than subjective when it comes to the news. Do you think all news is true? What is the function of a newspaper?

With the development of
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modern technologies and tendencies,
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 of
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 has become a topic of concern. More importantly, civilians in the present era are more into observing trustworthy
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news outlets
 and at the same time criticising the frauds. From my perspective, novel information should be
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unburied
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ensure the human values ,
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 the immense improvements of telecommunication ,social
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 ,and virtual devices
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 are provided numerous
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 the trend has given
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birth to
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 of newslines ,which urge views ,comments ,and publicity. In that aspect,
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 figures tend to create headlines with
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pieces
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 political,social or religious opinions of editors or reporters.
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, the receiver would receive fake data ,which could lead them to creat an unnecessary or emergency conditions.
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 the economists, ''the impulsive buying'' can be caused by consumers ,as they absord exragerated reportings from channels.
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 had been widely seen in Covid 19 pandemic era ,which had caused conflicts and an imbalance in the market procedures. More importantly,as one of the oldest
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 resources newspaper should be a role
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 innovations. Even though
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 enthusiasts can make easy access to modern electronic
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 platforms, the traditional newspaper has not failed to maintain its demand. In that aspect, in reporting of the sensational
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 ,which are related to government ,society ,religions ,economy or peace
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 bodies should play their roles wisely to ensure the communal well-being ,and the civil defence.
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Japan, New
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,and Canada tend to strictly follow sensorship laws ,in traditional newspaper reporting, as grade school and other
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undergraduates
 are
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 newspapers. Looking from an
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 'Change is inevitable'. In that aspect, every communal figure should step forward to recognise the process of
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 and
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 reporting to secure
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their
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opportunities
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and governing authorities should play their cards wisely to mitigate
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challenges
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 spreading.

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task response
Answer both questions more clearly. Say directly that not all news is true, and say clearly what a newspaper should do.
coherence and cohesion
Make your main idea easy to see in each body paragraph. Put one clear topic sentence first, then explain it.
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Use examples that are more direct and easy to follow. Some examples are interesting, but they need a clearer link to your point.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas in a simpler way. Some sentences are very long, so the meaning becomes hard to follow.
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Keep your view the same from start to end. At times, your opinion is present, but not fully clear.
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You answer the topic and show a clear interest in truth in news.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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You try to use examples such as Covid-19 and some countries, which helps support your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
There is a general paragraph order, and your ideas move from fake news to the role of newspapers.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • objective reporting
  • subjective interpretation
  • media bias
  • misinformation
  • journalistic integrity
  • editorial standards
  • fact-checking
  • watchdog role
  • public opinion
  • newsworthy
  • ethical journalism
  • credible sources
  • press freedom
  • sensationalism
  • media literacy
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