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The plans below show what an airport looks like now and how it is expected to look after redevelopment in two years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans
illustrates that how
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illustrate what
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 Southeast
airport
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 is going to
be
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apply
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look like after redevelopment in
couple
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a couple
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 of years.
Overall
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, it will be
erected
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a
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 novel change in
paradigm
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the paradigm
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 of
airport
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 especially
in
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at
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 the top of the building
which
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, which
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 is intentionally build sky train so that people don't need to walk all along. First of all and foremost, it will have a great deal of gates
that is
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 why
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airport
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the airport
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 will be bigger afterwards. Not only
this
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there
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, but there
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is
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are
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also
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opened
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open
 shops where it is empty
in
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at
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 present.
However
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, security password control and customs
remains still
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remain
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 in the future.
Secondly
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, there will be another bag dropping area and café.
Likewise
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, there will be
new
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a new
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 ATM
center
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centre
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. There will
also
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 be
car
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a car
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 hiring place in
infrastructure
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the infrastructure
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 at
bottom
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the bottom
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 right side after fostering. Currently, Southeast
Airport
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 has a simple structure with a single walkway leading to eight gates. Departing passengers pass through security and passport control,
while
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 arrivals go through passport control and customs. In conclusion, the Southeast
Airport
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 undergoes substantial development, with a large expansion of gates and the introduction of new passenger facilities.

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Task response: Write the main changes more clearly. Say what is new, what stays the same, and what gets bigger.
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Task response: Add more key facts from the plan. For example, note the number of gates now and later, and the new sky train.
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Task response: Do not add ideas that are not in the plan. Use only what you can see.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Put similar ideas together. Start with an overview, then write one part about the top area and one part about the bottom area.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use simple linking words well, like now, later, also, while, and overall.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Check sentence order and grammar, because some lines are hard to follow.
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You gave an overview and said the airport will grow and add new parts.
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You mentioned some key changes, like more gates, shops, the sky train, and new services.
coherence and cohesion
You used paragraphs and added a clear ending.
coherence and cohesion
There is some use of linking words to connect ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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