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Band 4

A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary/unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at the museum." Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary/unpaid work. In your letter • explain why you want to do voluntary/unpaid work at the museum • describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful • give details of when you would be available for work

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task response
Write all 3 points from the task: why you want the work, what skills you have, and when you can work.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear start and end, like Dear Sir or Madam and Yours faithfully.
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in one paragraph.
task response
Do not repeat the same lines. Add new ideas and details.
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Use a polite letter style.
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You show a clear wish to join the museum team.
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You say you can start at once.
coherence and cohesion
The meaning is clear in some parts.
The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Enthusiastic
  • Volunteer
  • Part-time
  • Unpaid work
  • Museum director
  • Skills and qualities
  • Customer service
  • Organization
  • Team player
  • Flexible
  • Reliable
  • Positive attitude
  • Availability
  • Professional goals
  • Community contribution
  • References
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